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A Surprised Birthday...? by ~awesomealikat:iconawesomealikat:



And just like that she was…dead, on the pavement floor with a puddle of blood, her blood, surrounding her delicate body…
I bet you’re wondering who she is? Why is she dead? And so on…
I’m also guessing you want to know what happened.
Well I’m here to tell you.
So, it all starts here…

The main character of this story is a girl, and she goes by the name of Gabriella McCartney. She is a 15 year old with beautiful brown hair with matching eyes.
She was a medium size person, not fat but yet not too skinny.
Gabriella was happy with her life, her friends; she adored them. And her family, she loved them.
She was also one the smartest girls at her school, and she was also quite pretty and popular.
She also had no enemies what so ever.
Gabriella loved her life.

Just as her life couldn’t get better, I think it probably just did.
Today was her 16th birthday.

An alarm broke the silence, at the ‘McCartney’s’ house.
A hand reached out and shut of the alarm.
It was Gabriella’s hand.
She looked around her room and blinked a few times, soon getting her vision back.
She stretched her arms and got of her bed, passing her calendar.
“Wait…” Gabriella turned her head and walked back to her calendar, looking at the date today.
“Oh my gosh! Today’s my birthday! I’m FINALLY 16!” she cheered.
Gabriella was so happy, because today she was no longer a kid anymore, today she was practically an adult, and was able to get her Driver’s License.
“This is the best day ever!” Gabriella smiled to herself.
She knew every morning on her birthday; her parents and her brothers would give her a birthday breakfast, and gives her all the food she wanted.
So she went downstairs, going to act all surprised when she headed downstairs.
Gabriella went downstairs and once she saw everyone she acted surprised.
“Oh you guys! I would have never guessed!”
“You knew that we were going to make you a breakfast…I told you she would know…” Gabriella’s older brother glared over to their mother.
“Anyway, honey, happy sweet 16th!” Gabriella’s mother smiled stepping forward to her.
“Thanks mom! Thanks everyone! This means a lot.” Gabriella sat down at her spot of the table and took a bite of her pancakes.
About 5 minutes into her breakfast, Gabriella took a quick look at her clock and jumped out of her seat.
“Ahh! I’m late! Daniel’s going to kill me, if I’m late again!”
Gabriella jumped out of her seat and grabbed her school bag. “Sorry everyone, I have to go! Remember I have my giant birthday party tonight; now don’t forget” Gabriella smiled at her mom.
”Don’t worry, we won’t forget, now go to school and have fun,” Gabriella’s mom told her, and pushed her out the door and waved to her.
Gabriella turned around for one last look at her parents before she headed off to school.
She ran to the bus before it departed.

She closed her eyes and sighed, walking up the bus stairs.
Gabriella opened her eyes seeing all of her friends shouting ‘HAPPY BIRTHDAY’ to her.
“Oh my!” laughter came from Gabriella as she walked over to her seat where her friends and boyfriend was.
“Hey, happy birthday sweetie…” a voice came from beside her.
It was none other than Daniel, her boyfriend.
He kissed her on the forehead and smiled.
“Thanks…I can’t believe that you remember....” Gabriella softly said to her love one, and rested her head on his shoulder.
Daniel smiled softly saying. “I would never forget this day…”
“ME EITHER!” A loud voice came from behind the two lovebirds.
“Oh, I know you would never forget, Shannon, you’re like my best friend!” Gabriella turned around and started to talk to Shannon about her party.

The day felt like it would never end, but no one mind.
Almost everyone at Gabriella’s school sung ‘Happy Birthday’ to her, gave her hugs, gave her little notes saying, ‘Happy Birthday’, or they just said ‘Happy Birthday’ to her.

Like I said before today was probably the best day ever…
Until the evening, after Gabriella got home…

“MOM! WHERE OUT OF CANDLES!” Gabriella’s voice came from the kitchen. “And I can’t…I repeat CAN’T have a birthday cake without the right amount of candles” Gabriella was freaking out, because in a few minutes all her guests, friends and family members would be coming in from her front door. And she wanted everything to be perfect…
“Honey, calm down…we’ll get the candles…just relax, go and check on your brothers if there doing the decorations right...” Gabriella’s mother told her.

Gabriella sighed turning to the living room, seeing if her two stupid brothers, with an IQ score of 80 were done the decorations.
”Are you too DONE with the decorations yet??!?” Gabriella growled at them.

”Nope...” They were laughing.

”You idiots!” Gabriella shouted losing her patience, “Can’t ANYONE do anything right! Arggg!”
”Here, let me do the decorations because you idiots can’t do anything!” She snatched the ribbons and balloons from them and started to finish the decorations before everyone else came.

After a bit, everything was done, and everyone started to come.
Gabriella’s friends and family started to enter.
Everything was perfect…

On the dance floor at Gabriella’s, everyone was dancing like there was no tomorrow. After a few pop songs were done, a slow song came on.
“So…you want to dance?” Daniel looked at Gabriella and smiled.
“Of course!” Gabriella smiled soon walking up to the dance floor, with Daniel and started to dance together.
A few more couples came on, but everyone was focused on Daniel and Gabriella.

“Hey…I g-got…something for you...” Daniel was stumbling over his words, as he pulled out a small locket for Gabriella.
She was speechless. She didn’t know what to say.
“Daniel…this is so beautiful…” she said putting it on her neck.
“Thank you…” she kissed him on the cheek.
Daniel blushed a lot. He was about to kiss for back until, Gabriella’s father came in.
“Mmm, sorry but Gabriella I need you to get something for me from the car”
“Dad! But it’s my birthday! Can’t you get it?” Gabriella glared at him.
He gave her the ‘Gimme that attitude missy and you’re grounded’ face.
“Fine…I’ll be back…” she rolled her eyes walking out the house and slamming the door.

Well to make this short…
Gabriella went outside on the side of the road to the car, getting what her father wanted her to get.
And just as she shut the door and turned around, a car going around 160 km/h blinded her with the headlights and ran over Gabriella in mere seconds.
She died instantly after the car ran over her.
And just like that she was…dead, on the pavement floor with a puddle of blood, her blood, surrounding her delicate body…
So now you know what happened to her.
©2006-2009 ~awesomealikat
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Author's Comments

hey ya'll!
This is my first DA ever! YAY!.....
well i did this story for my english homework, and well i thought it was ok, so I'm decideding i'm putting it on here!
It's kinda bad, abit...like i trailed off alot and so on, but please comment!
if you think i should add more on here then tell me too :D
enjoy!!

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:iconmangamissy:
ahhhhhh i love it.....hehhehehehehe

--
When they've tortured and scared you for twenty odd years,
Then they expect you to pick a career,
When you can't really function you're so full of fear

-Green Day
:iconawesomealikat:
lol! Yay! Thanks you so much :)
I got an 'A' on that too :XD: hehehe
:iconflynfreako:
wow! eye-catching intro! :D
poor girl >.<

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:star: Flying Koi?:star:
My old art -> ~flynfreakoarchives
:iconawesomealikat:
Lol, thank you :P
I'm going to try and write more stoires but I'm too lazy to do so XD
:iconshinyrubies:
It's so sad *sniffle*
But that's a good thing, as long as work can evoke some kind of emotion it's good ^^

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